W.A.L.T describe a picture and moment.
My favorite part was editing it because it was fun. my least favorite part was the writing because it was tiring and boring.
Do you have some feedback for me?
Immediately a moment came that a crazy penguin has decided to belly flop into the water! It is clearly no other penguin wants to jump in, after that... As the poor little penguin waddles back to jump in again as his chest shoots up like a proud penguin and once again he goes in in the position of a belly flop and then out of nowhere he spins and does a perfect dive into the spawn of a whales mouth.
Well that is a sudden ending! I absolutely love the start it is a different way of starting. In the middle you could of added a bit more detail. The picture is very cool I like how the picture matches your story. Did you have to do it for school work or not? From Charlie I, From Makauri school!
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